User contributions for Tonbo0422

24 December 2023

• 04:3204:32, 24 December 2023diff hist −3‎ mBreaking Bad‎ Changed "increased more drastically" to "increased exponentially." Kind of odd use of "drastically," which usually connotes something excessive or negative.

22 October 2023

• 14:4714:47, 22 October 2023diff hist +2‎ mMungo Park (explorer)‎ →‎Aftermath: Changed "what had passed" to "what had occurred."
• 14:4414:44, 22 October 2023diff hist +3‎ mMungo Park (explorer)‎ →‎Death: Changed "the boat" to "Park's boat" because otherwise it is unclear whose boat it is referring to.

20 April 2023

• 22:0322:03, 20 April 2023diff hist +4‎ Hubertus Knabe‎ →‎Political views
• 22:0222:02, 20 April 2023diff hist +1‎ Hubertus Knabe‎ →‎Political views
• 22:0122:01, 20 April 2023diff hist +9‎ Hubertus Knabe‎ →‎Political views: Changed "Under pretext of"—very badly translated, obviously from German—changed whole sentence to: "With the avowed intent to call the East German regime to account" Other minor edits.

1 August 2021

• 18:5718:57, 1 August 2021diff hist +1‎ Joachim Hamann‎No edit summary
• 18:5618:56, 1 August 2021diff hist +11‎ mJoachim Hamann‎ Added "the" to initials like "SS" and "SA"

1 December 2020

• 20:5820:58, 1 December 2020diff hist +1‎ mRizzuto crime family‎ Change "is gunned down" to "was gunned down"

29 November 2020

• 21:3821:38, 29 November 2020diff hist −15‎ mRizzuto crime family‎ <<Walter Gutierrez, a money launderer for the Rizzuto family, was shot to death multiple times in West Montreal on July 16, 2012.>> Really? He was shot to death and then he was shot to death again? (fixed it) Also, changed "Gurierrez" to "Gutierrez."
• 21:2821:28, 29 November 2020diff hist −13‎ mRizzuto crime family‎ Changed multiple instances of inexplicable reversions to the Historical Present tense, deleted one "It is noted that . . ." This whole section needs to be rewritten; it looks stitched together.

27 October 2020

• 17:1817:18, 27 October 2020diff hist +3‎ mWorld War I‎ →‎Economic effects: Changed "many have lasted to this day" to "many have lasted to the present" to (arguably) improve the style to more formal.

14 September 2020

• 14:4314:43, 14 September 2020diff hist −8‎ mBeslan school siege‎ Removed "illegal" from the sentence "involved the illegal imprisonment of over 1,100 people" since it's completely redundant. There is no possibility of a "legal" imprisonment of over 1.100 people.

4 September 2020

• 21:3421:34, 4 September 2020diff hist +234‎ Talk:Saionji Kinmochi‎ →‎Minister of Education Dates

26 August 2020

• 21:2521:25, 26 August 2020diff hist +1,019‎ NUser talk:Zukiellan‎ ←Created page with 'Well, first of all, let's say it correctly. It's "SovereignIST," not "SovereignTIST," but that is a minor quibble. I don't even know how this article is being a...'current

28 July 2020

• 13:3613:36, 28 July 2020diff hist 0‎ mGiant sunfish‎ →‎Description: changed "by it's congener" to "by its congener,"

25 June 2020

• 18:3818:38, 25 June 2020diff hist +2‎ mOxygen minimum zone‎ →‎Physical and biological processes: Added a couple of commas that made the article more readable.

28 January 2020

• 21:0621:06, 28 January 2020diff hist +4‎ mDuran Duran‎ →‎1978–1980: Formation and early years: Changed awkward sentence about Andy Wickett to: "Among them was Andy Wickett, a vocalist they had prior to Simon Le Bon. Wickett had a major part in the writing . . . " This is much less confusing.

20 December 2019

• 16:4016:40, 20 December 2019diff hist 0‎ mGordon Prange‎ Shame on any editors of this page! Gordon would be pissed. Changed "Seig Heil" to "Sieg Heil"

17 September 2019

• 15:5515:55, 17 September 2019diff hist +7‎ m38 Special (band)‎ Changed "for the railroad he worked at" to "for the railroad at which he worked"

1 September 2019

• 21:0421:04, 1 September 2019diff hist +1‎ mInvisible Men‎ →‎Background and recording: Good god, along with the rest of the Genesis/members/Ant Phillips/Ant's albums, the writing is atrocious. "Phillips credits Scott with his enthusiasm, but recalled that musically he would push him into areas that he was uneasy with despite his confidence and inexperience" . . . Who would push WHO? Which He did what to whom? Unclear, badly written, needs to be completely redone.

19 May 2019

• 16:4416:44, 19 May 2019diff hist −6‎ mDavid Foster‎ →‎1971–1999: changed Peter Cetera from being Chicago's "lead vocalist"—he was NOT the lead vocalist, just ONE of the vocalists—to "bassist"

13 March 2019

• 22:0922:09, 13 March 2019diff hist +1‎ mPeat‎ changed "termd" to "termed'

8 March 2019

• 23:0223:02, 8 March 2019diff hist +85‎ mNeural adaptation‎ Improved grammar, wording of sentence "After a little while though this is no longer felt" . . .

23 February 2019

• 16:2016:20, 23 February 2019diff hist +10‎ Ecological collapse‎ The effects of the BP oil spill are still being felt today [how so?] (I am questioning the basis for this statement; in addition, it is ungrammatical)

28 January 2019

• 18:5818:58, 28 January 2019diff hist 0‎ mTrophic cascade‎ changed comma to semicolon in the following passage: "fish can dramatically reduce populations of zooplanktivorous fish; zooplanktivorous"
• 18:5318:53, 28 January 2019diff hist 0‎ mTrophic cascade‎ changed "vegatation" to "vegetation"

12 December 2018

• 23:4023:40, 12 December 2018diff hist 0‎ mPorcelain crab‎ →‎Evolution: inserted semi-colon after "pairs" instead of comma into "three instead of four pairs; the fourth pair is reduced and held against

14 May 2018

• 21:4021:40, 14 May 2018diff hist 0‎ mEastern Air Lines Flight 401‎ →‎The crash: changed "was heard of the pilot's voices" to the plural possessive "was heard of the pilots' voices"

31 December 2017

• 19:0819:08, 31 December 2017diff hist −1‎ mInternet censorship in Russia‎ →‎History: changed "on-line" to "online" in accordance with general usage.
• 19:0719:07, 31 December 2017diff hist −1‎ mInternet censorship in Russia‎ →‎History: changed "most part of country" to "most of the country"

7 December 2017

• 02:4602:46, 7 December 2017diff hist 0‎ The Man Who Never Was‎ →‎Reception
• 02:4602:46, 7 December 2017diff hist +187‎ mThe Man Who Never Was‎ →‎Reception: Described how video rentals were possible in 1956.

4 December 2017

• 17:4417:44, 4 December 2017diff hist +15‎ mMarvin Hewitt‎ Changed "Hewitt decided to withdraw from the public glare and at least has not been heard of since." to a more encyclopaedia-y "Since approximately that time, there have been no reports of any further exploits by Hewitt in the media."

22 September 2017

• 03:1203:12, 22 September 2017diff hist −9‎ mPancreatitis‎ →‎Severe acute pancreatitis: Why "Severe pancreatitis *is associated with* organ failure"? Is this a medical term? I changed it to "can cause," which is the obvious meaning in plain English. If you see other instances, please change.

8 June 2017

• 21:3421:34, 8 June 2017diff hist +1‎ mBattle of the Somme‎ →‎Transport: Actually put *in* a comma to break up a very long sentence: "not be built quickly enough to sustain an advance and that pausing" becomes "not be built quickly enough to sustain an advance, and that pausing
• 21:3221:32, 8 June 2017diff hist −1‎ mBattle of the Somme‎ →‎Transport: Inserted a para break to make it easier to read. Also removed another strange comma: "Experience of crossing the beaten zone, showed that such lines" becomes "Experience of crossing the beaten zone showed that such lines"
• 21:3221:32, 8 June 2017diff hist +2‎ mBattle of the Somme‎ →‎Transport: Inserted a para break to make it easier to read. Also removed another strange comma: "Experience of crossing the beaten zone, showed that such lines" becomes "Experience of crossing the beaten zone showed that such lines"
• 21:2921:29, 8 June 2017diff hist −1‎ mBattle of the Somme‎ →‎Transport: removed a weird comma that made a sentence hard to decipher. "and that pausing while communications caught up, allowed the defenders to recover." becomes "and that pausing while communications caught up allowed the defenders to recover."

15 April 2017

• 22:2222:22, 15 April 2017diff hist −1‎ mGeorge Benson‎ →‎1970s and 1980s: "re-discovered" => "rediscovered"
• 22:1722:17, 15 April 2017diff hist 0‎ mGeorge Benson‎ →‎1970s and 1980s: Changed "He got many hit singles" to "He had many hit singles". This article seems to be very poorly written! Cobbled together by many amateurs. Needs complete rewrite. Benson deserves better!

1 March 2017

• 22:5622:56, 1 March 2017diff hist +6‎ mLGBT linguistics‎ →‎Language use as performance: Put paragraph breaks in to relieve the extremely long paragraph there in the middle. Perhaps someone can go in and fix the incredibly long-winded sentences?

23 February 2017

• 18:5318:53, 23 February 2017diff hist −2‎ Ian Anderson‎ →‎Later career: Changed "suffer a hiatus" to

20 February 2017

• 18:5618:56, 20 February 2017diff hist −307‎ m790th Bombardment Squadron‎ →‎History: Removed entire duplicate paragraph beginning "In combat, the unit served . . ."

1 February 2017

• 15:5015:50, 1 February 2017diff hist +2‎ mIn the Court of the Crimson King‎ →‎Recording: Changed "8-track" to "8-channel." It's a minor quibble, but as the owner of an 8-channel tape deck back then I hated it to be confused with the popular car stereo at the time. "8-channel" is more accurate.

24 December 2016

• 01:1501:15, 24 December 2016diff hist −36‎ mMichel Bisceglia‎ →‎Jazz musician: Removed the first name "Michel" in a couple of places—it's unnecessarily repeated. Fixed a couple of awkward grammatical places, in general just cleaned up a bit and made it more readable.

21 June 2016

• 00:3200:32, 21 June 2016diff hist +29‎ mJimmy Van Heusen‎ →‎Life and career: Name: Nikki Hornsby. This name comes out of nowhere with no introduction and becomes a major part of this article.

22 April 2016

• 17:4517:45, 22 April 2016diff hist +1‎ mMuscular dystrophy‎ →‎Cause: changed "Whats more" to "furthermore"

29 February 2016

• 21:2021:20, 29 February 2016diff hist +5‎ mPeter Cincotti‎ Changed "renown" to "renowned," changed "Peter"to "Cincotti" ("Peter" is too familar for a Wikipedia entry)
• 04:4804:48, 29 February 2016diff hist +1‎ mMount Royal‎ →‎Mount Royal Park: cannot upload photo http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-2PvsXa5pfLs/VjF1RNthF1I/AAAAAAAAHeY/RaKzY2k9WxI/s640/path4.jpg