Talk:USS Cincinnati (CL-6)/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)
Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox;
- She was
alsothe third Navy ship namedfor"after" the city of Cincinnati- fixed
- Link Ohia, Atlantic Fleet, Pacific Fleet, Mediterranean
- Didn't link Ohio since it's already linked in Cincinnati and I've been told that would be overlinking. But I will if you want.
- from 1928–1932 -> from 1928 to 1932
- fixed
- Be consistent of mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic", "South Atlantic"
- Hopefully I caught them all and fixed.
- A comma after "After the war"
- fixed
- she was
quicklydeemed surplus- fixed
- Per WP:INFOBOXUSE, flag icons and thumbnails must be avoided in infobox.
- Per WP:WORDPRECEDENCE, call flags are accepted.
- She was
- Section 1;
- to be built by Todd Dry Dock & Construction Co., Tacoma, Washington,[5] "on" 27 August 1917
- fixed
- and launched on 23 May 1921,[3] the cruiser was sponsored by Mrs. Charles E. Tudor; I think it is better to break this sentence
- fixed
- Her keel was laid on 15 May 1920, and "the ship was" launched on 23 May 1921
- fixed
- and "was" commissioned "on" 1 January 1924
- fixed
- having been designated by the Honorable John Galvin; what does this mean?
- He designated who the sponsor would be. I can remove it if it is too confusing.
- and commissioned 1 January 1924, Captain Charles P. Nelson in command; start this as a new sentence and as "The ship was commissioned on 1 January 1924 with Captain Charles P. Nelson in command.
- fixed
- Use full forms of the units on their first mention
- fixed
- Originally she was to
mount"be mounted by" ten 6-inch (150 mm)/53 caliber guns- fixed
- above-water, torpedo tube mounts for 21-inch (533 mm) torpedoes; no need of comma
- fixed
- Please be consistent on using the conversion template; "21-inch (533 mm)" "three inches (76 mm)"
- Not real sure what you mean but I removed the second conversion because it had already been converted in the previous paragraph.
- against muzzle blast and splinter damage.[4] [7] Fix the space
- fixed
- to be built by Todd Dry Dock & Construction Co., Tacoma, Washington,[5] "on" 27 August 1917
- Section 1.1;
- Some of these changes were
save"to reduce" weight - fixed
- these didn't prove "to be" reliable
- fixed
- Its also reported that Cincinnati mounted a pair of Army 40mm Bofors guns also; check the usage of "also", replace "mounted a" with "was mounted by a"
- Reworded, hopefully fixed.
- Some of these changes were
- Section 2.1; all good
- Yay
- Section 2.2;
- After
only a"an" year in the Pacific"," Cincinnati returned to the Atlantic- fixed
- A comma after "After the United States joined the war"
- fixed
- Fix the space; searching for German blockade runners .[6]
- fixed
- Fix the space; before she sank. [6]
- fixed
- from March 1944
until"to" July 1944- fixed
- Consistency on mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic" "South Atlantic"
- fixed
- After
- References needed for sections 3 & 4
- Added proper reference.
- Images OK, no plagiarism found
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:18, 17 November 2017 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
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